I obliged..
You said, " Let's walk together"
I matched my steps with yours
You said, "Would you be mine?"
I blindly took the plunge
You said, " I Love You"
I felt my heart blossom
You said, " Come into my arms"
I bathe in passion
Then............
You said, " Good bye"
I stood there....
I am still there....
Waiting for you!!!
9 comments:
I like the take or approach and structure. Ahem, have you been reading my songs? Cause, this one's approach is remotely similar to one of mine written many years back. No accusations, just my observations.
Nicely written! Simple yet effective!
nice poem...loved the pattern of the poem ....
U couldn't finish the poem on a happy note...???
u r a sad person machi... :-)
a nice one again, Sheena! so heart rendingly true!
As usual can relate to it nd so can understand it!
Wonderful work as usual! :)
aaila! this is awesome! first the post starts beautiful... & then it turns sad...
good one! :)
@ Brosreview,
Ah huh.. Not read you post.. So it remains the creation from the womb of my mind...
@ Arun,
Naah machan, not a sad person... But certain things in life, just don't let you live in peace.. It keeps surfacing.. every now and then
@ Mav,
Thanks buddy.. Now I know your name, but I prefer Mav.. :)
@ Leo,
Hehe.. thanks dear
How it sucks. Your poems make me cringe from inside...
@ Ms. R,
That was an intense comment.. But a painful reality...
First time at your blog..& this one really touched me.:)
Keep writing.Im following you :)
@ FMS,
Hey buddy.. Nice to have you here..
M glad it touched you..
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