Trying to find your existence
Now, it stands there
Dust laden
Smudging those moments spent together
Lying on the ground
I crave for your warmth
But what surrounds
is morbid loneliness
Speaking of your extinction
from my life.
Standing high
on the precipice of defeat
I try to hear your heartbeat
Listen to them speak
but the howling winds of the yonder past
Muffle the words, keep them stolen
Closing my eyes
I attempt to conjure your image
working every detail
But I'm blinded now
Struck with your sudden disappearance
What remains
is only a vague silhouette..
Bathing in the cool air,
I try to breathe your fragrance
That which once filled me with longing
But what I breathe now
Is the stench of those decayed desires
Looking up
I try to feel your lips on mine
Wanting to burn with passion
But now I'm here
Holding the ashes
Of that overwhelming emotion
Am here now
Standing beside the grave
Singing a requiem
to our love that was..
For with that love, a part of me is taken
What remains of me
Is a body without soul............
12 comments:
Nicely written!!! Emotion-filled piece. Good job!
A couple of error - "listen to them speak" and "But, I'm blinded now". No offence meant.
Marvellous work, Sheena! Da intense pain portrayed wid eloquence in dis one!
My fav lines
*Closing my eyes
I attempt to conjure your image
working every detail
But am blinded now
Struck with your sudden disappearance
What remains
is only a vague silhouette..*
Wonderful work! Luvd it to the hilt! Keep em coming! :)
@ Brosreview,
Both errors corrected, thank you.. As I said, won't be offensive, comments are always welcome - good, bad, ugly... Will let you know if I ever get offended.. :)
@ Mav,
I appreciate the constant encouragement coming from your end.. Trust me it means a lot.. Criticisms are also welcome.. :D
you out did urself da... superb!
wow....very painful words....
fell in love with the 4th and 5th stanzas...
n u said...i'm good ...huh...modesty ???
nice and beautiful..!!!
Closing my eyes
I attempt to conjure your image
working every detail
But I'm blinded now
Struck with your sudden disappearance
What remains
is only a vague silhouette..
sadness versified here !! this one was superb :)
@ Sheena
Dnt worry. If nd wen I spot sumthng nt quite in place will point it out! :)
tc!
@ Salil,
Yeah I guess this one is the best so far.. for its construction..
@Arun,
U r good dude and you can't deny that..
@ Yamini
I still have to visit your blog.. Will be doing it soon
@ Prats,
2 votes for those stanzas.. this is getting better.. :D
l.o.v.e.l.y ....
migzie,
after reading this, 3rd time or so...
this guru has become ur shishya! ;) :)
it was very beautiful!
@ Leo,
Dude, you are embarassing me!!
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