Darkness that shrouds me
Me that is completely lost
Lost in a swarm of emotions
Emotions that go astray now
Now, they break barriers of sanity
Sanity which seems distant
Distant, more like an illusion
Illusion was, "my life"
Life that is sinking slowly
slowly in the arms of apocalypse.....
15 comments:
Precise and strong! Well done! Hmm, I'd probably use "I'm awaken" or "I awake" in the first line. But, that is just me. Keep writing!!!
That was a beautiful dark loop poetry. And as always I loved it!
Wonderful loop! A whirlpool mebbe of emotions dat swirl around threatenin to drown one in them....to depth which seem obscure nd insurmountable!
Luvd da intensity! Very impressive!
:)
@ Brosreview,
I am glad you liked it!! :)
@Ms.R,
M glad you liked it, this is a first (proper attempt) at loop poetry..
@Mav,
:D :D
Beautiful indeed! It went with a bang!
Classic!
@ Krish,
Thanks for dropping by mu blog and for your comments.. :-D
oooh..dark poem...i luv it..loved the title very much...
but what is this loop poetry...?didn't understand it... :-(
@ Arun,
Yup its too dark.....
Well if you observe the last word of the previous line becomes the first word of the next line and so on..
This pattern is called loop, got introduced to it thru TWL.. ;)
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I am so much flattered by your comments that I have come to your blog to give a bunch of THANK YOU...!
Krishanu
This piece is beautiful and provocative. Yes, dark, but that too is a part of reality and the "loop" that is life. You are a bearer here of truth. The question is how will we handle darkness when it arrives?
Glad you popped into my blog so I can find yours. I hope you will visit again.
I'm also glad that you will purchase Thus Spoke Zarathustra. Please know that Nietzsche offends a great many people, especially Christians--of which I am one, Jews--of which my maternal great grandfather was one, and women--of which I too am one. :-)
Nonetheless, he is a favorite philosophers for many reasons.
Blessings!
@ Judith,
Hey, glad you could drop by my blog..
Thanks for your comments.. I believe I can handle the book.. :D
Hope to see you here often..
God Bless!!
Okies...will give a try on it sometime...
wow wow wow wow wow!
perfecto loop Migzie :)
@ Leo,
Got inspired from TWL.. Thanks to you guys..
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