nothing more than emptiness in sight
A peaceful silence outside
but droning noise inside
Thoughts melancholy in the mind ruffle
Discomfort and suffocation now shuffle
Tranquil put at bay
Mental frame in a disarray
Anger ruthlessly at me, claws
Jealousy clutches me by its paws
Pain raises its ugly hood
Sorrow spewing poison as it could
In this colossal trauma, I wince
Take it, take this away before I collapse
Devastation at its height
It rules me with all its might
Yet I struggle
And put up a fake smile
To deceive the world all the while
For a smile is all it takes......!!!
8 comments:
Ah! I feel this one. This is mighty intense!
The harsh truth of wearing a smile and hiding the truth as it is least expected or entertained in the world today. Neatly expressed here!
I like the darkness of this one. I really do. Keep it up!!!
I love many lines here. I cannot decide on which one to quote as it will be an injustice to the other lines. So, I won't. Keep them coming!!!
awesome work again......nice style using couplets and a good job with the rhyme-scheme too!
Now for the thought....You hav put forth an intensely familiar vista with such blazing expressions dat it sears through the heart...straight through.....
The whole process of bein in agony, tryin to withstand da pain, the writing of the soul with da hurt....and finally da facade that one puts up to disguise his emotions (smile)....buildin a dam of sorts to hem his/her emotions in.......u have described it in an aptly dark way!
This one was beautiful in its darkness coz of its stark reality...nd derfore I cld relate to it! Marvellous job!
*Bows*
Anger ruthlessly at me, claws
Jealousy clutches me by its paws
Care to explain?? U know wat explanation am lookin for girl!!!
Maybe if you start smiling at urself... start beliveing in it a bit more..then maybe you can counter the pain. Your smile need not be just a facade. If you want, your smile could be the key to your happiness. A smile is all it takes....
Enough with my crap, huh!
I liked it :)
@AJ,
I guess M late, but glad you liked it!!
@ Mav,
Loads of appreciation for this one - jeez, thanks....
@ Tabs,
U know it isn't it?
don't u call me guru again... i am ur shishya only! :)
painted smile and sorrow inside,
holding u captive, nowhere to hide,
pain shoots through, u cry in vain,
never knowing when to smile again.
hurts ur mind, claws at your soul,
u feel the world can swallow u whole,
u want to surrender, put in chains,
unsure if your joys, went in vain.
something like that i felt after reading ur poem.. brilliant Migzie..
@ Leo,
That was brilliant in itself.. Agreed we can keep changing our roles, watse ;)
Ya, what you wrote are verities...but terrible though.
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