The beads of sweat,
which once were your crown
Girl, why do they now seem
Like a crown of thorn..
Tears that were once
a glistening stream of emotions,
Girl, why do they now seem
An unfathomable weakness...
The drops of rain,
which once rolled on your tongue,
Girl, why do they now taste
Bitter than Poison...
The moments of Silence
that you once basked in
Girl, why do they now seem
Miserably deafening..
The sliver of moonlight
peeping through the curtains
which once danced on you face
on the rhythm of your breath
Girl, why do they now cause
A painful remorse!
Your eyes which once
mirrored the rainbow
Girl, why do they now
Reflect scary dark clouds?
The pearls of solitude
which once bejeweled you
Girl, why do they now
seem to slice your spirit through?
The once passionate kiss
that lingered on your cheeks
Girl, why do they now
seem to be a scar on your face?
The elixir of love,
which once filled the glass of your soul
Girl, why does that glass
now seemed cracked
that elixir escaping you!!
The sensuous embrace
which you so craved for
Girl, why do you shrink away
As if it were a tightened noose?
The tantalizing breeze
which once carried the songs of life
Girl, why don't they now sound
like music to your ears?
The sand on the beach
which once laced your feet
Girl, why do they now seem to
Carry you into the depths of the past
Girl, is this you?
Where are you going to?
4 comments:
Hmm, yet another strong one from you. I liked the theme and loved the expression (I love Q&A / A&Q styles).
I liked the concluding phrase in all stanzas except one - "bitter than poison". Just my opinion. No offence meant.
And, I reckon it should be "carry you into the depths of the past".
Overall, this is good. Keep writing!!!
@ Brosreview,
I agree that "bitter than poison needs a change, I re-read it and its a little out of place, I guess. Lemme try changing it!!
And thanks for the correction, made the changes, Monsieur!! :D
poetc brilliance
chriz
i second Chriz... poetic brilliance indeed! :)
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